THIS. Just...this is what this ship is, both the good and bad. I am absolutely blown away by how perfect this is. I must say, milk_and_glass said much of what I wanted to say, so it seems unnecessary to repeat it all, no matter how right she was.
I think you did a phenomenal job of giving us Will's POV without once straying from Rachel's; a feat not often seen, and you did it beautifully. You managed to strike the most evocative (and, well, provocative) balance between sexy and wrong, and the tone of the piece came through perfectly, making me feel the same conflicting thoughts that Rachel (and Will, of course) felt.
I'm also so glad to see the allusions to Will's snowballing--how he never takes that first step, but he sure as hell keeps it going--with lines like "She’s learning that staying still is the cardinal secret to making him unfold."
In addition, the fact that Rachel did not reciprocate, might be one of the most truthful moments I've ever read in a fic. Because really, that is spot on for Rachel in this situation.
Beautiful piece, and I hope to see much, much more from you on this journal! Thank you so much :)
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Date: 2011-01-18 07:11 am (UTC)I think you did a phenomenal job of giving us Will's POV without once straying from Rachel's; a feat not often seen, and you did it beautifully. You managed to strike the most evocative (and, well, provocative) balance between sexy and wrong, and the tone of the piece came through perfectly, making me feel the same conflicting thoughts that Rachel (and Will, of course) felt.
I'm also so glad to see the allusions to Will's snowballing--how he never takes that first step, but he sure as hell keeps it going--with lines like "She’s learning that staying still is the cardinal secret to making him unfold."
In addition, the fact that Rachel did not reciprocate, might be one of the most truthful moments I've ever read in a fic. Because really, that is spot on for Rachel in this situation.
Beautiful piece, and I hope to see much, much more from you on this journal! Thank you so much :)